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With this poem Krishna I started blogging. Here it is:
This flute player
Has been creating
Enchanting notes for us.
Yet we have no ears for Him.
His music flows on.
It’s not that no one
Had ever heard Him.
O little Butter Thief
Have pity on us
Will You?
The new (edited) poem:
Not air but love
vibrates when the dark
boy touches his flute.
Yet there’s no taker
of his love.
Eons pass on.
Little butter thief
plays on
alone
in His solitary
abode.
Awaits.
Posted for dVerse MTB ~ Let’s Kick It Up a Notch hosted by Victoria
Note:
Krishna (/ˈkrɪʃnə/; Sanskrit: कृष्ण, Kṛṣṇa in IAST, pronounced [ˈkr̩ʂɳə] ( listen)) is a major Hindu deity worshiped in a variety of different perspectives. Krishna is often described and portrayed as an infant eating (stealing) butter, a young boy playing a flute as in the Bhagavata Purana,[3] a young man along with Radha, a young man surrounded by beautiful women or as an elder giving direction and guidance as in the Bhagavad Gita. They portray him in various perspectives: a god-child, a prankster, a model lover, a divine hero, and the Supreme Being. Worship of the deity Krishna, either in the form of deity Krishna or in the form of Vasudeva, Bala Krishna or Gopala can be traced to as early as the 4th century BC Wikipedia
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I appreciate the notes Sumana. Too bad there is no taker for his love nor enchanting notes. I also like the ending of “Awaits” of the revised poem. I love both versions actually, smiles.
Even I love both poems!
The first tells of others animus toward the boy, the revision speaks his voice. Both intriguing poems, Sumana!
Yes indeed. Both intriguing with the same story but the subtle difference. Honestly, I like them both nd would happily choose either. So sad there is no one to take the love.
So very beautiful, and endearing, Sumana. I love that He is referred to as Little Butter Thief. Very cool. I love how the second poem took flight from the first.
Aww… This is poignantly written, Sumana. And I love learning about Krishna, thank you for sharing. ☺️
Sumana, your rewrite is truly a beautiful work of art! It brings about a feeling of melancholy. Very touching. I would place my favorite lines below but can’t choose -it’s just perfect.
This just took my breath away–a prayer really. I love the metaphor of the flute for the breath of the divine. Thank you so much. Both are beautiful but the revision is resounding.
Metaphysical yet personal–I like both versions, or at least parts of both–perhaps a hybrid their version will be whelped one day. Your close on the new one is killer.
Fascinating to see the development from a sweet, fresh poem to one so much more profound, and even more beautiful.
Love both the poems as each has its own charm and flair ❤
I enjoyed reading the first and the second poem….the changes in the new version were subtle, but clever, ones! Nice to read your words again, Sumana.
both poems are lovely!!! 🙂 🙂 🙂