Sultry summer blows
out the pretty blooms’ glow.
They brown.
At the crest of woe,
all ride, seethe and slow
them down.
Dog days freely flow.
Their torrid smile glows.
We frown.
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Oh, this is lovely! 🙂
First they bloom, then they age and wilt and wither with the heat…but they are still lovely. There is beauty in this.
Especially like the last stanza!
The entwining of your lines sparkle! I read the first lines together, then the second lines, then the third, and it holds its meaning. What beautiful flow!
Love your response and photo ~ I hate it when flowers brown, wither and die in the summer heat~
We have those dog days where I live, too. So frustrating when you are helpless to stop them dying. Nice poem!
Is this about flowers or…? Like most good poetry, what is isn’t always what it is. Nicely done!
The seasons pared down and lai’d. Well done!
Nice pic and lines
There’s so much here to love Sumana. First I love Sultry Summer – beautiful, sexy alliteration (in a devil sort of way). The other thing I like is how you contrast ‘glows’ as first something beautiful that has been blown out and then secondly as the ‘glow’ of the smile of the clever dog – the dog days of summer. How you personify ‘dog days of summer’ is very clever and wonderfully done. Really great work!
To me this wrote of the transitory nature of life here on earth. I found this skillfully done, to be able to create a metaphoric piece using this form.
I hope you get rain soon.
You had me at /dog days/. Watering our lawn & garden balances out the rainless days
I like the way you wrote about this side of summer with humor. To me your poem also highlights people’s coping abilities with what goes around them.
Much inspired by your use of the form — what potential of it you demonstrated here, Ma’am.
I can feel the way the good piece of summer pass to quickly… i feel blessed to have a long (and cool summer)
A lovely beautiful poem!